A DA related poem - The Beautiful Lady In the Blackberry Hat |
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A DA related poem - The Beautiful Lady In the Blackberry Hat |
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Hey guys,
If you don't know me, other than the quote from me (re: Midget, etc.) on the home page, it's because I tend to lurk more than post. I'm making an exception this time, since I have something DA-related to share.
I've been working on some new poetry for an upcoming compilation. I finished this piece the other day, and as I was reading over it, "Traps, Ensnares, Etc." popped into my mind. As I hummed along while reading, I couldn't think of a more appropriate title for this particular work. Perhaps Bella Donna inspired the work on some subconscious level.
Hope you enjoy.
J. Patrick Lemarr
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The Beautiful Lady In The Blackberry Hat
Told, she did, her paramour
That all things lovely, right, and pure
Are due philosophy de jour
Fanaticism’s lure
Said, she did, its wicked grip
Could all archaic myths make slip
Then every shred of faith will strip
And bloody reason’s lip
Told, she did, her lover new
What good a deadened soul can do
To fools who steep in moral stew
On some forgotten pew
Said, she did, that God is dead
Slain by those of learned head
Who opted for His flesh instead
Of prayer and daily bread
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01-26-2009 23:10 |
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RE: A DA related poem - The Beautiful Lady In the Blackberry Hat |
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Beautiful work. Thoughtful and insightful. Post more often!
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01-26-2009 23:12 |
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Great poem. It seems odd to see a mention of a Blackberry without the accompanying reference to Obama but hey, it's your poem.
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01-27-2009 21:06 |
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very nice- !
cadence is the key there- well "told"
and worth reading a number of times to absorb.
I dont write poetry , but music.
(well - which is poetry masked in distraction at times)
I put a lot of thought into my lyrical content( I know-for those who may have heard any-stop laughing!)- and feel that cadence can really define things-
look to Dr Love-who I find is a master at it.
and - agree! - post more oft
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01-28-2009 08:47 |
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Thanks for sharing your work. You write beautifully. I love it!
I confess I often have a problem deciphering poetry so I'm writing this to show how I have broken it down. Please let me know if I got it right.
Theme: I am interpreting this as a new believer's prayer to Christ in which the believer describes how modern thought has compromised simple faith.
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I. Told, she did, her paramour
That all things lovely, right, and pure
Are due philosophy de jour
Fanaticism’s lure |
This stanza- is it saying that the things we are supposed to think on are corrupted or compromised by modern philosopy and that fanaticism lures people into poor modern philosophy?
Phil 4:8 Finally, brethren, whatsoever things are true, whatsoever things are honest, whatsoever things are just, whatsoever things are pure, whatsoever things are lovely, whatsoever things are of good report; if there be any virtue, and if there be any praise, think on these things
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II. Said, she did, its wicked grip
Could all archaic myths make slip
Then every shred of faith will strip
And bloody reason’s lip |
Here, the same evil, modern philosophy makes old myths slip (displaces older philosophies? Are they myths, then or just seem to be?) This modern philosophy also strips faith and bloodies reason. I can see this illustrated in the modern philosophy of evolution which is widely espoused. This philosphy undermines faith in the creator and despite its claims, is neither logical nor reasonable as well.
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III. Told, she did, her lover new
What good a deadened soul can do
To fools who steep in moral stew
On some forgotten pew |
I'm not sure who the lover is, is it Christ? Here she is telling this lover that a soul that has listened to this modern philosophy becomes useless and dead. It may philosphize on morality and may even attend church, but it is faithless, useless, dead.
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IV. Said, she did, that God is dead
Slain by those of learned head
Who opted for His flesh instead
Of prayer and daily bread |
In this stanza, the final blow to Christianity is dealt when the wise ones espousing their modern philosophy have attacked Christ's message and gospel to the point that they have completely lost God in the mix. They should have kept to the simple gospel (daily bread) and submission to God (prayer).
This is not to say that God is dead at all, but that the modern philosophy has caused these wise fools to declare him to be dead in their reasoning.
Am I close or way off?
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Golly, all this time I thought it was about a hat.
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Servantsteve, whether you got it right or not, I don't think I could read it without thinking of your analysis.
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well - thats the art of art
there is no more perfect interpretation then what you got out of it personally
I agree thats the tone I felt also., and saw each stranza similarily.
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01-28-2009 10:04 |
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Originally posted by servantsteve
Thanks for sharing your work. You write beautifully. I love it!
I confess I often have a problem deciphering poetry so I'm writing this to show how I have broken it down. Please let me know if I got it right.
Theme: I am interpreting this as a new believer's prayer to Christ in which the believer describes how modern thought has compromised simple faith.
quote: |
I. Told, she did, her paramour
That all things lovely, right, and pure
Are due philosophy de jour
Fanaticism’s lure |
This stanza- is it saying that the things we are supposed to think on are corrupted or compromised by modern philosopy and that fanaticism lures people into poor modern philosophy?
Phil 4:8 Finally, brethren, whatsoever things are true, whatsoever things are honest, whatsoever things are just, whatsoever things are pure, whatsoever things are lovely, whatsoever things are of good report; if there be any virtue, and if there be any praise, think on these things
quote: |
II. Said, she did, its wicked grip
Could all archaic myths make slip
Then every shred of faith will strip
And bloody reason’s lip |
Here, the same evil, modern philosophy makes old myths slip (displaces older philosophies? Are they myths, then or just seem to be?) This modern philosophy also strips faith and bloodies reason. I can see this illustrated in the modern philosophy of evolution which is widely espoused. This philosphy undermines faith in the creator and despite its claims, is neither logical nor reasonable as well.
quote: |
III. Told, she did, her lover new
What good a deadened soul can do
To fools who steep in moral stew
On some forgotten pew |
I'm not sure who the lover is, is it Christ? Here she is telling this lover that a soul that has listened to this modern philosophy becomes useless and dead. It may philosphize on morality and may even attend church, but it is faithless, useless, dead.
quote: |
IV. Said, she did, that God is dead
Slain by those of learned head
Who opted for His flesh instead
Of prayer and daily bread |
In this stanza, the final blow to Christianity is dealt when the wise ones espousing their modern philosophy have attacked Christ's message and gospel to the point that they have completely lost God in the mix. They should have kept to the simple gospel (daily bread) and submission to God (prayer).
This is not to say that God is dead at all, but that the modern philosophy has caused these wise fools to declare him to be dead in their reasoning.
Am I close or way off? |
Sorry I was slow to respond. My Internet is down and I'm having to reply to all my emails, etc. From my phone.
You are, for the most part, correct. The only major difference between my intent and your perception is - the "lady" believes what she says. She is attempting to educate her lover (man) on the folly of faith while I, the writer, am using her words to show the folly of philosophy.
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Thanks! That clears up my tough spot that she says "God is dead" in the 4th stanza. Excellent poem- it really got me thinking. The meter and rhyme is perfect without sing song or triteness. I love it.
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01-28-2009 11:05 |
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nicely done, sir
always good to see a fresh spade in the soil
might there be a reciprocal exploration of the ageless Reply in the works?
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I do so love good pottery - er, poetry.
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01-28-2009 17:32 |
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I thought you just liked good pot
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Hey, I'm not as think as you stoned I am.
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